Sunday, October 21, 2012

Spare Me The Horror~

Sorry, removed for further editing. I seriously suck at it, so do not hold your breath :p




85 comments:

  1. Very well written and creepy, Ghazala:)

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  2. Good one.
    Well written.
    So glad you woke up from the dream.

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    1. Indrani dear,

      This is fiction and in the story it actually happens. Thanks :)

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  3. Horror, now, Ghazala! Well done!

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    1. Suresh,

      Try writing one too. I would love to read. Thanks and happy halloween :)

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  4. That was brilliantly scary Ghazala! Phew...

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  5. Scaaaary... The photos didn't help either, I'm going to have nightmares now :-)

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    1. She will come for you tonite..! LOL
      Kidding and happy Halloween :)

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  6. scary !!!! i guess I am reading horror for the first time on your blog ..well done !!!!

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    1. Hi TTT,

      I have written a few on my dotty's request. She is a big Halloween fan. Thanks :)

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  7. yes ghazala this one is eerie and scary

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  8. Ghazala,

    Frightening! Did you have the photo's before the story? Did it inspire you? Or a nightmare? Just curious.
    Well told. The stress of moving, childbirth, life and death. Excellent visuals.
    Happy Halloween! I'll post mine after midnight.

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    1. Dear Yolanda,
      I am use to this question. I have had many asking me if I selected the picture first or wrote the post. Well, I always write first and look for a picture to fit the bill. And usually i find what i am looking for, thanks to Google:)
      This is an old post of mine, which i wrote long back. This was a two part story but I had to chop it down for RFW. Thank you for your visit ~

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  9. That was a scary tale, I can only imagine your mindset at that time. Phew! This post reminded me of a Japanese horror movie called, Dark Water.

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  10. Ghazala. That was gripping!
    Good job, yeah!

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  11. Ewww..that was creepy,ghaz. The scary visuals are still playing in my mind. It felt like watching ..'The Omen' where a child to steer humankind to hell takes birth! Great job.
    I loved it!!

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    1. Dear Di,

      Omen is classic, this is just a fraction of it. thank you and I am glad I scared you, happy halloween :)

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  12. Well written. When I started reading I thought you had a baby. :) Then the realisation dawned.... This is better than Ram Gopal Varma's script.

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    1. Dear IW,

      Thank you so much, I loved your feedback. Happy Halloween :D

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  13. Now that scared me too..

    Happy halloween to you.. Copywright it you never know who is going to steal the idea ..

    Bikram's

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    1. Hi Bikram,

      How do i copyright it? Please help.
      And I am glad I scared you..!
      Happy Halloween :)

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  14. You have been excellent with every kind of topic that you have been writing about and now this one is a very good horrifying script.

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    1. Hi Suhas,

      Thank you for your kind words. It makes me happy to know, you feel that way. I try :)

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  15. creepy creepy creepy.....meri raaton ki neend uda di aapne!! scary as hell!!! wonderfully written!

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    1. Dear Lil princess,

      Happy Halloween..! Enjoy the spook and stay chill. Thanks :)

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  16. This was really spooky,you bring everything alive in front of my eyes.

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    1. Dear Indu,

      This was a longer story, I would have liked to scare you a little more. Thanks and happy halloween :)

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  17. I agree with your other commentators, very scary but I am so glad everything went well with the birth of the baby (or did it) do you have a sequel in mind?

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    1. Dear Sally,

      The ghost has gifted the baby so all is not well with the baby..LOL

      Sequel? This was written as two parts but I clubbed everything together and edited out quite a bit. Thanks and happy Halloween :)

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  18. Loved it....I hope it never happens for real though :P

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    1. Dear Sandy,

      OMG, if happens in real, I would not know where to run to..hee hee

      Thank for reading and happy Halloween :)

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  19. Excellent...I hope it never happens though :P

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  20. Oh my God!! that was a really scary one! and how on earth did you find such an apt pic? Superb piece of writing there!!

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    1. Dear Nirvana,

      I have always managed to find pictures that fit my stories. Yes, sometime I do add couple of line to my stories to make the picture more suitable. But I usually write first.

      Thank you and Happy halloween :)

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  21. Gosh. This is scary. Well written.

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    1. Dear Kiru,

      Welcome and happy Halloween. May we keep meeting in blog sphere :)

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  22. Dear Ghazala,
    What an excellently written, scary, creepy tale.
    You write with clarity and an economy of words.
    Well done.
    Best wishes,
    Anna
    RFW No. 46 - 'Jenny Holland's Robinson Crusoe Halloween'




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    1. Dear Anna,

      Thank you so much. I am glad you noticed the economy of words, almost made this into flash fiction :)

      This was one such piece, where i wrote and felt the scenes as well. Boo to you :)

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  23. That picture spooked me out ~ This is a scary plot, magnified by the thought that she is about to give birth to the baby ~

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    1. Dear Heaven,


      Thank you and happy Halloween to you, girl..!

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  24. This one!!! From my childhood I'm afraid of darkness and this shadow concept and ghosts!!! Yet I love to read the horror stories rather than watching them on big screens.. A very good narration depicting the inner feelings of a person hearing creaky noises from a place near them where none lives.. Excellent!!!

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    1. Hari,

      Welcome to my space. Thank you for your detailed feedback. It made me feel good.
      I too like to read horror stories and it
      creeps me out more than horror movies :)

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  25. No words. This is the best. I could not put it here the mixed emotions it created.

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  26. Very creepy baby story! And the picture is very scary. Good work.

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  27. Nice writings...

    May I suggest you a template for you blog? It's little distracted.... :(

    Tech Prévue · तकनीक दृष्टा

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    1. Thanks and you may suggest a template :)

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  28. Thats really too scary and the very picture is not leaving my eyes!!

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    1. Hi Renju,

      LOL..! I am glad I could scare you :)

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  29. What a terrifying thing for a pregnant mother to endure. I recall having nightmares while I was pregnant. Your story was completely eerie and what a great entry.

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    1. Dear Candi,

      I too got nightmares while I was pregnant.
      Thanks and happy Halloween :)

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  30. Hi Ghazala
    What a nightmare, and that picture made your story even creepier. I'm left with the impression that her baby is possessed from the ghost following her. That would be terrible. Loved it.
    Nancy

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    1. Dear NR,

      Yes, it is terrible and imagine it in real life..! LOL

      Thanks and happy Halloween :)

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  31. Ghazala, you weave a creepy tale. That image is PERFECT for your story. What an ending, so powerful. I was fully creeped out. Happy Halloween! :D

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    1. Dear Denise,

      Thank you, I am glad I could creep you out:p
      Happy Halloween :)

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  32. Best of luck with the judging! I'm glad it's Ann and Nas who have to choose from this awesome lineup! :D

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    1. Yes, some great stories we have for this one :)

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  33. I'm thinking adoption is an option for this child, lol.

    wow, great imagery and vivid concept. And can you believe men; they do sleep through everything! Very sinister Ghazala.

    ......dhole

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    1. Donna,

      Yes, this baby would soon be up for adoption, anyone interested? LOL

      Thank you dear and happy Halloween :)

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  34. Felt the experience of seeing a horror movie in your words...Beautiful writing Ghazala!

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    1. Dear Sri,

      Thank you and happy halloween :)

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  35. OMG I'm so glad I'm not pregnant. That was truly scary.

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    1. Hi,

      LOL, I am glad too, for you :p
      Thanks and happy halloween :)

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  36. Oooohh! That was chilling! Great job, very well wriiten Ghazala! I was glued right throughout!

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    1. Dear Arti,

      Thank you for your words and Happy Halloween :)

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  37. Ghazala,

    Such a sinister tale. A evil ghost, terrorizing and imprinting on an unborn child. This is the scariest and most unnerving type of horror because it could happen. There are MANY angry spirits, sadly.

    Well done.

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    1. Michael,

      Was at your space and what a story you have weaved..! Bravo.
      Thanks for reading mine and Happy halloween :)

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  38. That gave me chills. Add to her personal terror the fact that no one believed her, I was impressed with her concrete ego in that she believed herself.
    So far, this is the scariest of all the submissions I've read.

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    1. Thank you so much, Erin. I am thrilled with your feed back :)

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  39. Oh my goodness, how terrifying. Somehow this vaguely reminds me of Rosemary's Baby - have you seen that movie? Anyhow, awesome job getting in the spooky element here. And the visual you included made the whole story seem all the creepier.

    Apologies, I am just now getting through all of the House of Horrors excerpts. Hope you're having a good weekend!

    ~Wendy Lu

    The Red Angel Blog

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    1. Dear Wendy,

      I have not seen Rosemary's baby but now that you mentioned it, I want to see it.

      So good to meet you here, please visit again and please do not apologize. Thanks :)

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